So, following that last post below about my uncertainty over whether I was going to write any more... yeah, I have bowed to the inevitable and started putting together another couple of episodes.
Both episodes are going to be about the sheer, unbelievable, craziness which took place around Christmas and earlier this year. If you had a hard time believing Indecent Descent... well, you'll never get close to believing one word of these two little adventures.
The first one will be out very soon; I've written up all the notes I kept in my journal for that one already. It's all about what happened when Bethan came home from uni, basically having turned into a bisexual emo-girl, and brought her new girlfriend Emily with her. I made a miscalculation; Jadie missed a text message and as a result we got caught basically with her bent over the kitchen table and me, well... behind her. That was a shock for Bethan. But what happened afterwards was more of a shock for me, especially when I found out Jadie's motivation for inviting the two of them to stay and watch us. True love does some seriously freaky shit sometimes, doesn't it?
The second one I haven't even started pulling the journal notes together for yet so it'll be a while before that comes out. I think I'll probably put it on Amazon so it won't be a free one. I kind of want to restrict the audience! It's going to be a boundary-pusher for me because it will deal with something which happened back in January which was a bit of a watershed in my relationship with Jadie. It will definitely include the stories Jadie told me about what Jess got up to with Caitlyn and Caitlyn's boyfriend at Christmas. They were the back story to what then happened with Caitlyn and Jadie and me. And Mr Purple. It was messy in every single sense of that word; physically and emotionally. Looking back now, it was just the start and I'm glad it happened, but at the time I did struggle a little bit with what we were doing, so I think it might be quite hard going back over those notes.
Watch this space, anyway. Once the next episode is published I will post again.
Great news! Looking forward to it. Thanks Jim.
ReplyDeleteCheers Kev. It's out now.
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ReplyDeleteSorry if this comes across as rude but if you are going to write any more then you really need to work on your writing style. I bought your book on Amazon because it was cheap and about the best thing I can say about it was that you do get a lot of words for your money. But that is the problem as well - it was far, far too long.
I skipped a lot of it because it just is not interesting reading about every last thing which is going through your head and there is so much other irrelevant detail in there that it is ridiculous at times. If you are going to write erotica then you need to cut it right down to the things that matter. It's fine to think you are building up a character but you can do that in a few sentences and references here and there instead of cataloguing each thought as it happens. That just slows the pace down so much that it becomes tiresome. And there's only so many times we need to hear about how cute or delightful or adorable somebody is. Once you've said it you don't need to keep repeating it.
It also comes across as if you can't decide whether to write a romantic love story or proper erotic fiction. The two things do not go together. It is really jarring to read in pornographic detail about how you have just come in her face or whatever and then two paragraphs later you're talking about how much you love her.
Like I said I don't mean for this to be rude but you seem to be asking for feedback and other people don't seem to be telling you what I think you need to know. Which is basically don't waste your time writing any more unless you can do it in a lot fewer words than you have done so far.
I don't agree with this at all I think the detail of what is going on through Jim's head is what makes it funny and emotional sometimes. You really get to see his personality and Jadie as well because of the detail in there. I feel like I know them both now after reading the book and when the sex happens I feel a connection to it. You are right that it is long and maybe it is not the right style for normal erotic fiction but I really enjoyed reading it anyway and I am really looking forward to a new episode.
DeleteThanks for the defense! I'm happy that you feel a connection; that's one of the reasons I'm publishing this stuff at all, to share the joy. Yeah, I know how trite that sounds but... it is the truth, really.
DeleteIn response to the original Anon, firstly, thanks for sharing your views on here rather than posting it as a review elsewhere. At least here, I get an opportunity to respond although, to be fair, I can't really disagree with anything you say. I completely understand all of your criticism. Guilty as charged, and all that.
DeleteThe thing is, I don't think I can actually write in a different way. It just sort of comes out like that. I suppose it's just a matter of personal taste as to whether you enjoy the way I do things. Some people seem to. You - and I expect many others - evidently don't.